florist arrangement, revisited

This florist arrangement, which I sort of inherited, was so typical--glass budvase, carnation, Baker's fern, baby's breath--that I decided to see if I could deconstruct it in a way that made it look, well, less floristy. Result: two vases holding only the baby's breath and fern (pictured in second photo). I'm still trying to find a way to use the white carnation that doesn't look stiff and unnatural.